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Tuesday, 23 March 2010

Last Request

I'm just about to do the title page for my portfolio, and suddenly find myself floundering about the title. So I thought I'd ask you what you think is better: Slow Peel, or The Slow Peel?

My theme isn't Heroes, as I once thought, but Labels. Those labels that we inherit, pick up, choose, lose, and discard throughout our lives. Hero being just one. My characters all have problems with their labels, they are trying to hang on to the ones they want and discard the ones they don't. Labels like: 'mother,' 'housewife,' 'tidy,' 'stylish,' 'gardener,' 'foreigner,' 'friend.' One of them, for example, has realised that 'party girl' has been replaced by 'drunk' and wants rid of it. I hope the story shows how 'party girl' slowly peeled off. Hence 'Slow Peel' for the main title. But do I use the definite article or not?

I tried to upload the cover artwork to show you but it's such a huge file blogger can't seem to manage it. But to give you an idea here is a photograph of it on my computer screen. It's a picture of my head rendered in logos. If you click on it it will become big enough for you to make some of them out.

25 comments:

The Pollinatrix said...

I love it! My immediate instinct is without "the." That way you get an extra layer of meaning, as "peel" could be a verb or noun.

Rachel Fox said...

Yes I'd say no 'the' too.
x

Sharon Longworth said...

Either sounds pretty good to me, so I'm guessing this is just last minute nervousness - go with your gut instinct and I'm sure you'll choose right.

steven said...

cool image! cool title(s) both work . . . i know that's no help! best wishes on this the next stage of your journey. steven

renaissancewoman said...

I'd dump the article - that way it can be ambiguous - it could even be
an instruction. And you have to make your readers do some of the work....

Philip said...

don't need the "the". Photo thing is weird but I like it. I also like the theme a lot, labels and the shiftingness of them. My labels have shifted over time. punky, anarchist, do-gooder, allotmenteer, husband.
If you ended up having a blue plaque on your former home what would you want it to say?
Philip

savannah said...

i think sharon nailed it, go with your first choice and don't over think the title. great artwork for the cover!all the best, sugar! xoxoxoxo

Kim Ayres said...

Your instincts are are most likely to be right, and certainly I agree with them. Cover idea is superb, and the definite article is not required

Titus said...

Luckily, I'm in agreement with all the above. I'd go with "Slow Peel", but that is just my opinion.

My opinion on the cover art is that it's brilliant!

Jane Moxey said...

I love the cover artwork image! Really clever! Best wishes for a successful outcome to your Big Project! Peel on! Gosh the English language is a challenge sometimes. Peal, peel and all that jazz!

debra said...

I LOVE the photo illustration, Eryl. It's fabulous. And the title? I would go with your first instinct and don't overthink it.

angryparsnip said...

Go with your first idea, I have found out that is usually the right choice.
Love the artwork

Congratulations on your finished work !

cheers, parsnip

Eryl Shields said...

Thanks everyone. It's nearly 6am and I haven't yet got to bed. So I won't bother now, I still have to check the layout, and by the time I do that it will be easier to have a shower and go to town to get the thing printed and bound before trying to get some sleep. If I go to bed now I won't wake up till supper time.

Tonight I am going to have a very large drink.

Lulu LaBonne said...

... I cybernetically clink your glass in a toast to this monumental effort.

I love the artwork and agree with the others about simply Slow Peel

xx

Pat said...

Slow Peel rocks my boat.
Now can you please find me a title to replace Past Imperfect aka Tears before Bedtime. No rush:)

Elisabeth said...

I'd leave off the attribution. 'Slow Peel' alone works brilliantly.

That portrait is amazing - scary. Ahh, the horrors of iconography and labeling.

Golden West said...

Not to muck up the works, but have you considered "A Slow Peel" - still works as noun or verb. I always like words in combinations of three (visually). Love the image!

Scarlet Blue said...

Slow Peel is more contemporary.
Love the artwork!
Sx

Eryl Shields said...

Suddenly I have nothing to do. The thing is done and I am knackered with very puffy ankles.

I went for the 'The' in the end because of the 'beautiful three' or whatever it's called. The extra word simply looked better on the page, and has a slightly better rhythm, I think. Anyway it's done now and as the title is the least of my worries...

I now have to wait for goodness knows how long to find out whether I've passed or not. And if so to what degree. But now it's bed time.

Leigh Russell said...

Slow Peel - definitely ditch the definite article. That way all the initial emphasis is on 'Slow' and the title has much more impact, in my opinion.
The image is amazing, and really beautiful!

Wigeon said...

Well done Eryl! I just love the photo. It's so good to have it all done and dusted isn't it? Now it's in the hands of the gods who are your internal and external examiners.
Graduation for this year is 7th July so one assumes you should hear before then! Last time round I had my results and my classification clarified I think at the end of May or beginning of June. Who knows but you've got the graduation date if nothing else! Now have a huge breather, take it easy and enjoy the feeling of a job well done.
Heaps of love xxx

Eryl Shields said...

Leigh ~ isn't the image great? It makes me look much younger and prettier than I really am, no wonder some people love their labels!

Wigeon ~ Not sure that I can claim it's a job well done. More like a job frantically done, I only really got to it in the last few weeks and I hate to think how many misplaced apostrophes and typos are in there. So I won't read it now until I get feedback, too traumatic.

newjenny said...

Congratulations! If the writing is half as good as the picture, it deserves very high marks.

Titus said...

It's done!
Sleep, and then dance in the streets.

Elizabeth said...

I was going to vote for Slow Peel
but both are great............
good luclk this is a wonderful achievement.

I love the idea of lables or not
at the dog run we have
Michael who reads books
Elly who is too kind for her own good
RobertDog Park
v RobertHusband

Sadly
I have become Elizabeth from central casting

Hmmmmmmm